Technology Practice Makes Perfect
This request was made in Oklahoma City at Hillcrest Elementary School for 5 iPads for a music class that totals to be $2,164. The school is mostly low-income students. The project was submitted September 12th and needs to be funded by January 12th. I think the teacher did an okay job at explaining what they needed and why they needed it, but it did seem like they needed a little bit more information. She started off by explaining how when she got to that school, they did not have any instruments, sheet music, or supplies in general. It sounded odd to me that she wanted to purchase iPads when she said she lacked so much of other supplies. At the same time, she did not specify what supplies they did have currently. It was kind of confusing to know if they already had an iPad that they were using and just needed more. For me it was not so clear why they needed just 5 iPads for a classroom full of students. The teacher explained that the iPad can tune the instruments and practice counting rhythms, however I don’t know how 5 would be sufficient for all of the students. I think that the project request needed more detail. She did not go into depth, rather she gave some vague examples of how she would use the iPads. For $2,164, this was not so convincing.
Google It- Getting "Stemmy"!
This project is requesting $4,484 for Google Expeditions for grades PreK-2nd. The teacher requesting this is from Angie Debo Elementary, an Edmond Public School. This request was put in on September 8th and will need to be fully funded by January 1st. She first introduced the project by talking about how her school is more than a third low-income. She then discussed how her students are engaged and excited to learn. Later on, she described the qualities of Google Expeditions and vaguely talked about how her students would benefit. I personally don’t think this request was sufficiently descriptive enough, and I also critique how she mentioned that “a little” more than a third of the student body is low-income. I think that she was trying to take advantage of the “one third” fact of her school, which is different because Edmond schools are typically upper middle class. The other two Donors Choose links that I posted were from Oklahoma City schools where the student body is mostly low income, so to read about an Edmond school adding that “one third” into their request seems off to me. Besides that detail, I think overall this project could be done through cheaper virtual reality apps rather than one worth so much.
Talking Technology!
Of the three that I am critiquing, I think this one was the most concise and well written project request. The teacher that is requesting this is from Martin Luther King Jr. Elementary in Oklahoma City. She is a special needs teacher that is requesting one iPad, just one. The total cost for this iPad is $527.08 and by this point she only needs $153 by January 13th. She submitted this on September 14th. She first talked about the students that she helps and their abilities and disabilities. She was pretty specific of all the disabilities that her students have, but I really liked how she also talked positively about their abilities. To further her argument of why she needed an iPad, she also talked about the low-income area: “All of my students live in areas of poverty and face challenges with that everyday; school can be the only constant that provides stability in their lives”. In contrast to the other articles, I liked how she actually added a point to how her students live in poverty and didn’t just add it in there as a matter of fact. She was also very specific in describing how the iPad would help her students in learning grammar, syntax, vocabulary skills and help them hear their articulation errors to find a different approach in correcting them. At the end she said, “An Ipad can give them a voice and everyone deserves a voice. Help me give them a voice!”, which is something I really liked because it showed how well thought out she did this to grab a donor’s attention. This one was very well done.
One last point: I thought it was ironic how an upper-middle class school from Edmond was requesting more than $4,000 and a school from an actual low income community with a special needs class was only requesting one iPad. This is just something interesting that I noticed.
This request was made in Oklahoma City at Hillcrest Elementary School for 5 iPads for a music class that totals to be $2,164. The school is mostly low-income students. The project was submitted September 12th and needs to be funded by January 12th. I think the teacher did an okay job at explaining what they needed and why they needed it, but it did seem like they needed a little bit more information. She started off by explaining how when she got to that school, they did not have any instruments, sheet music, or supplies in general. It sounded odd to me that she wanted to purchase iPads when she said she lacked so much of other supplies. At the same time, she did not specify what supplies they did have currently. It was kind of confusing to know if they already had an iPad that they were using and just needed more. For me it was not so clear why they needed just 5 iPads for a classroom full of students. The teacher explained that the iPad can tune the instruments and practice counting rhythms, however I don’t know how 5 would be sufficient for all of the students. I think that the project request needed more detail. She did not go into depth, rather she gave some vague examples of how she would use the iPads. For $2,164, this was not so convincing.
Google It- Getting "Stemmy"!
This project is requesting $4,484 for Google Expeditions for grades PreK-2nd. The teacher requesting this is from Angie Debo Elementary, an Edmond Public School. This request was put in on September 8th and will need to be fully funded by January 1st. She first introduced the project by talking about how her school is more than a third low-income. She then discussed how her students are engaged and excited to learn. Later on, she described the qualities of Google Expeditions and vaguely talked about how her students would benefit. I personally don’t think this request was sufficiently descriptive enough, and I also critique how she mentioned that “a little” more than a third of the student body is low-income. I think that she was trying to take advantage of the “one third” fact of her school, which is different because Edmond schools are typically upper middle class. The other two Donors Choose links that I posted were from Oklahoma City schools where the student body is mostly low income, so to read about an Edmond school adding that “one third” into their request seems off to me. Besides that detail, I think overall this project could be done through cheaper virtual reality apps rather than one worth so much.
Talking Technology!
Of the three that I am critiquing, I think this one was the most concise and well written project request. The teacher that is requesting this is from Martin Luther King Jr. Elementary in Oklahoma City. She is a special needs teacher that is requesting one iPad, just one. The total cost for this iPad is $527.08 and by this point she only needs $153 by January 13th. She submitted this on September 14th. She first talked about the students that she helps and their abilities and disabilities. She was pretty specific of all the disabilities that her students have, but I really liked how she also talked positively about their abilities. To further her argument of why she needed an iPad, she also talked about the low-income area: “All of my students live in areas of poverty and face challenges with that everyday; school can be the only constant that provides stability in their lives”. In contrast to the other articles, I liked how she actually added a point to how her students live in poverty and didn’t just add it in there as a matter of fact. She was also very specific in describing how the iPad would help her students in learning grammar, syntax, vocabulary skills and help them hear their articulation errors to find a different approach in correcting them. At the end she said, “An Ipad can give them a voice and everyone deserves a voice. Help me give them a voice!”, which is something I really liked because it showed how well thought out she did this to grab a donor’s attention. This one was very well done.
One last point: I thought it was ironic how an upper-middle class school from Edmond was requesting more than $4,000 and a school from an actual low income community with a special needs class was only requesting one iPad. This is just something interesting that I noticed.